User:Haileyrobles/Evaluate an Article

Evaluate an article
This is where you will complete your article evaluation. Please use the template below to evaluate your selected article.


 * Name of article: Teeth blackening
 * Briefly describe why you have chosen this article to evaluate.
 * This c-class article stood out to me amongst the others and needed improvement of which can help me better understand how to edit an article.

Lead

 * Guiding questions


 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Lead evaluation
The introductory sentence doesn't clearly describe the article's topic by adding the purpose of teeth blackening. Its brief description does not cover the major sections. It doesn't mention how countries listed in the lead follow through with this practice in their culture. The lead isn't perfectly concise, but it's not too overly detailed either.

Content

 * Guiding questions


 * Is the article's content relevant to the topic?
 * Is the content up-to-date?
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?

Content evaluation
Majority of the content is relevant to the topic, but tends to sway from the topic when discussing the possible ingredients and other similar practices. Some content almost seems incomplete, or it doesn't fully complete a statement. In the lead it mentions how teeth blackening is believed to differentiate humans and animals, but is not talked about for the rest of the article. Nor does it mention how it is done in conjunction with other body modifications such as tattoos.

Tone and Balance

 * Guiding questions


 * Is the article neutral?
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * Does the article attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

Tone and balance evaluation
Teeth blackening in Japan is overrepresented in this article. It focuses too much on Japan while contributing little knowledge to other countries. The tone is a bit off when mentioning how soldiers "knocked up in the head" didn't want to appear ugly so they blackened their teeth.

Sources and References

 * Guiding questions


 * Are all facts in the article backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * Are the sources current?
 * Check a few links. Do they work?

Sources and references evaluation
One resource just leads to a page of publications on teeth blackening to choose from. Its external link is untrustworthy. The sources are not current, though they do reflect available literature on the topic.

Organization

 * Guiding questions


 * Is the article well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Does the article have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * Is the article well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Organization evaluation
The article could be improved, it isn't the most consistent nor concise. Though the article is organized into sections, the sections could be organized better. Be more precise.

Images and Media

 * Guiding questions


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

Images and media evaluation
It includes a few images that enhance the understanding of the topic, but not all are well captioned. The images are formatted to the right of the article, which helps from breaking focus from the article and causing confusion. Though visually the layout isn't the most appealing.

Checking the talk page

 * Guiding questions


 * What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic?
 * How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects?
 * How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class?

Talk page evaluation
Some conversations question one of the points listed in the article about how the wine/tea resulted in lead poisoning. Someone mentions that the tone used in one section needs to be corrected to fit said section and how in order to include how teeth blackening was banned, the article must mention how and why it was banned in Japan. It's rated in three other WikiProjects as a c-class article.

Overall impressions

 * Guiding questions


 * What is the article's overall status?
 * What are the article's strengths?
 * How can the article be improved?
 * How would you assess the article's completeness - i.e. Is the article well-developed? Is it underdeveloped or poorly developed?

Overall evaluation
This article still has lots of room for improvement. Not all sources given are reliable, therefore making this article untrustworthy. It's incomplete and underdeveloped.

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