User:Haleyferraris/Environmental effects of aviation/Cbright6 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Haleyferraris, Tjpratt24, Jacksong1702)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Environmental effects of aviation


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Environmental effects of aviation

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

- The lead does not have a one sentence concise starting point to introduce the topic straight up. A definition or brief introductory sentence would go a long way. There is a good overview of the upcoming content. The lead seems a little overly detailed with paragraphs that could be used in the topic designated for it in the content of the paper.

Content:

- There is a lot of relevant information that goes really in depth on all the types of pollution related to aviation, especially in the climate change area and in the mitigation portion. More focus could be put into the noise, water, and air pollution though.

Tone and balance

- There is a neutral tone and all the information is strictly factual.

Sources and references:

-From the sources I checked, they seemed to match up. Most of the info was backed with sources, but there is still the occasional lapse of content without a citation.

Organization:

- The organization is logical, breaking it up into climate change, the types of pollution, then mitigation seems to flow well.

Images and media:

- These are all good and add to the words in the text.