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Article Evaluation: Social construction of disability

 * Relevant info?
 * Relevance of the Medieval and Enlightenment periods in the intro paragraph?
 * Up to date info?
 * Information is not necessarily outdated, but needs to be presented in a more neutral tone
 * Things presented as information seem to be based in opinion
 * All information is based on the United States
 * General improvements?
 * Improvement in structure- reads like a personal essay, rather than an objective account of a sociological model
 * Poor overall organization as well as at the sentential level (rambling sentences, poor word choice)
 * Seems to be arguing for the social construction model
 * Citations need improvement
 * Already a separate page on The Social Model of Disability (which is short, but better written)
 * Neutral, balanced tone?
 * Personal tone, non-academic language
 * "seen as," "help to," "pervasive," etc.
 * "the Paralympics apparently was not important enough to deserve the same live coverage"
 * Clear bias toward the social-constructivist model (the topic)
 * Reliable citations?
 * Citation is minimal
 * Main source is The Disability Studies Reader
 * Statements about the medieval period not cited
 * Statements about the Enlightenment not cited
 * "A 1986 poll" not cited
 * Added: citation needed
 * "Education" section contains a quote that never ends or is cited
 * Issues on the talk page?
 * Other users have already removed irrelevant information
 * Consensus is that article content is disjointed and should maybe be redistributed into different existing articles