User:HammyJammies/Ammit/Transparentv Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

HammyJammies


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:HammyJammies/Ammit?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * 1) Lead - Good lead, it's straight to the point and covers the basics you need to know well! Maybe change the name of the lead from "Article Draft" but that could have been an oversight when publishing!
 * 2) Structure - The topics talked about are good and correspond to the Lead. However, the topic order in the lead is switch from how it is presented later in the article. A change in that would be great!
 * 3) Balance - Everything looks balanced and on topic. All points made are very clear and, once again, straight to the point with no issues! Since there are not many more topics about Ammit, I would say you covered all the basics! Maybe do a once over on both topics to see if anything is missing or wrong, you would know more than a messily editor would.
 * 4) Neutrality - It's very hard to not be neutral when talking about a mystical creature of an ancient civilization so you are all good on the neutral standpoint! It doesn't seem that you have a "stance" on Ammit, so good work! There are just some times when you need to add a buzzword here and there to keep the reader's attention.
 * 5) Sources - Almost all of the sources chose for this article are books from reliable sources, seeing as 8 out of the 9 are books. The sources are spread throughout the article well and balanced. It all looks well documented! The sources look excellent!

Good work on the article! It looks almost professional!