User:Hancun123/The rise of Esport in China/Blause Winterz Peer Review

General info
(provide username) Hancun123
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Hancun123/The rise of Esport in China
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)


 * Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you? I am pretty confused on the topic. Is the topic about Esport games like FIFA or is it about brawl games like League of Legends. It is a little confusing.
 * Is the article neutral? Are there any claims, or frames, that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? The article is poretty neutral. The only thing I would think is a little bit biased would be the populairity of esports but I know nothing about its personality for the most part.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? Yes, over represented would be the statistics in different decades. Underepresented would be why esports are popular. Also what kind of esports is this specifically about? When I think of Esports I think of FIFA games but this article talks about league of legends so what are we talking about in this article?
 * Check the citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article? There are no citations in this article as well, therefore I cannot see if the links work.
 * Is each fact supported by an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted? There are only two refrences cited at the very end of the article and the refrences are not links so I do not how reliable the information is nor where it came from.
 * Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that should be added? I am not sure how out of date the information is and I think a lot of stuff needs to be added. The reader needs to know why these games are popular. What kind of esport games you're talking about. What countries besides China is this popular in. The article needs a lot more information. Honestly.