User:HandsomeSquidward311/Food Apartheid/Adr2018 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

HandsomeSquidward311


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:HandsomeSquidward311/Food_Apartheid?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * None available

Evaluate the drafted changes
Your draft is a good start to the page. The lead defines food apartheid well and goes a good job distinguishing it from food desert while also keeping a balanced tone. The sections you came up with look well organize and would flow really well on the actual page. Everything that I think could be added is already set up on the draft so great work there. I am not sure what types of media to add to the page. Maybe a map showing the distance between grocery stores and a high minority neighborhood if that's available. You do a great job establishing the notability of food apartheid while also linking to similar but distinct topics and the way you have the draft set up, you can add more than three reliable sources. Great work on the draft it looks very good to me.