User:Hanna.sutherland/Mumilaaq Qaqqaq/NRomard Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? Hanna.Sutherland
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Hanna.sutherland/sandbox

Lead (will check back later in the week)
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?

No, not yet.


 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?

No, not yet.


 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?

No, not yet.


 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?

No, not yet.


 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

No, not yet.

Lead evaluation
As far as I can tell by digging through your sandboxes (no pun intended) and looking at the most recent updates on Mumilaaq Qaqqaq's published article, you have yet to create your own or modify the existing lead section for your subject. As I assume that you will be adding one eventually, I will answer these questions as "Not yet" for the time being and check back again in a couple days to update this section.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?

Yes, it is very relevant.


 * Is the content added up-to-date?

Yes, the information is current.


 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?

While there is nothing that doesn't belong necessarily, I wish there was a little more context and/or substance with each of these additions. Perhaps a quote could be included about how she views her age in regards to her professional capabilities, or maybe one from her speech - which I am assuming is the same "International Women's Day, 2017" speech referenced in the published article?

Content evaluation
I completely recognize how challenging it is to gather useful information about such a young politician from such a remote area (I can see on her talk page people working hard to figure out how old she is) With that said, the information you have gathered is undoubtedly important and relevant. Your contributions will certainly benefit this article.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?

Yes, you do a good job of using a neutral tone.


 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?

No, I don't view any of your contributions to be biased or partisan whatsoever.


 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?

No, in fact, I don't believe it is possible to overrepresent the viewpoint of this individual who represents such an underrepresented demographic. Nice job.


 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another

No, it does not. Great work!

Tone and balance evaluation
I believe that the young, inuit, woman in politics demographic is the epitome of underrepresentation. That is what makes an informative page like this so valuable. Your writing reflects no bias whatsoever, and I commend you for choosing this remarkable individual - she is the exact reason why an assignment like this is so fascinating and rewarding.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?

Yes, each addition is accompanied with a proper citation;


 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?

Certainly. I really appreciate the information that you have collected as I know there is not an extensive amount for you to draw from.


 * Are the sources current?

Yes. Each of the sources are current and relevant.


 * Check a few links. Do they work?

Yes. Each of the links was active! No problems whatsoever.

Sources and references evaluation
I completely understand how challenging it must have been to gather information on this subject. I commend you for collecting these solid sources that are relevant, appropriate, and current. She is an incredible individual and deserves so much more coverage - you are actively improving this! Really great job making the best of the circumstances.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?

While your content is well written, I interpret it to be fairly unrefined as your sandbox is very much a draft of ideas you intend on expanding upon rather than the finished product.


 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?

Not really - your work is very well written. The only thing I noticed was in the first line of the second paragraph under the Early Life section. You might consider replacing "apart" with "part" or "a part" when describing her speech. Other than that everything looks great!


 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

As much as it can be. While the very little amount of published information is likely what warrants only two sections on her published page, perhaps by creating a "Personal Life" section which speaks to where she grew up/went to school/etc., it will eventually draw more attention and garner more information on Qaqqaq!

Organization evaluation
In terms of formatting - being in the early stages of your research, data accumulation, and content delivery I think you are definitely on the right track. It is obvious that you have been putting thoughtful effort into gathering information and contextualizing it within the already existing article. I have no doubt that you will provide excellent, insightful contributions to this article with the information you have collected.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic? N/A
 * Are images well-captioned? N/A
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations? N/A
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way? N/A

Images and media evaluation
There have been no image or media additions to your article as of yet! Perhaps this is another thing you might consider doing.

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?

Yes. In my opinion, with a subject so underrepresented, any (valid) additional information is a great thing. You have done a nice job of gathering content that is relevant and insightful. With that, your contributions will not only improve the quality of the article, but make it more complete. Your hard work is benefitting this article and those (like myself) fascinated and encouraged by Mumilaaq Qaqqaq's political career.


 * What are the strengths of the content added?

With the published article leaving so much to be desired as it currently stands, the simple fact that you are adding to it is an awesome thing. Not only do you build upon the pre-existing information within this article, you offer new, valuable insights into the life and career of Qaqqaq. Your contributions are current, relevant, and very much appreciated. Really nice work!


 * How can the content added be improved?

As I mentioned in the "Organization" section - it is clear that this is still very much a work in progress and with that, further refining lies ahead. With that considered, the content itself is strong. Especially considering the lack of published information on your subject. I can tell that you worked hard to compile the most sound and relevant data possible and I commend you for that. Good job!

Overall evaluation
Hanna,

I am thoroughly impressed with the work you have but forth thus far and am excited to see how this continues to evolve in the coming days. I was unaware of Qaqqaq prior to reading your work and am now a big fan of her and her work. You did a great job with the resources you had access - gathering relevant information from good sources and displaying it in a very unbiased tone and nonpartisan perspective. While it may still largely be a work in progress, I am very optimistic for what your hard work will yield. There is no doubt in my mind that your contributions will be incredibly valuable to improving this article and spreading important information about this remarkable young person!

Really nice job, Hanna!

Noah.