User:Hannah-23-19/Ruth Winifred Howard/Remcelveen Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Hannah-23-19 and Liliane Umutoni)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Hannah-23-19/Ruth_Winifred_Howard?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Ruth Winifred Howard

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? : Presently the lead has not been updated to reflect any new content. It may be a good idea to add a few sentences that show what you have contributed to the article as a whole.

Content

Is the content added relevant to the topic? : The content added is very relevant to the topic. The section on Education and Career is particularly well developed and thorough. Everything written seems to be directly related to the topic of Ruth Winifred Howard

Is the content added up-to-date? : The content does appear to be up to date.

Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? : I would suggest adding a section focused exclusively on her research and contributions to the field of Psychology. It is probably important to show the influence that Howard had on the field of Psychology as a separate from her education and career. Obviously, it is good to include short sentences describing the trajectory of her career in the education and career section, but I feel like it doesn't allow you the room to discuss implications and reactions to her research. You also mention in the early life section that Howard was inspired to work with and help disabled children. I think it's important to mention how Howard went about doing this.

Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics?: Yes, this article does deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps because the topic of the article is about a woman of color in the field of psychology which is a field that has historically been dominated by white men. This article highlights the important contributions that Howard made to the field, and also how Howard advocated for more women to be in the field of psychology. One possible direction would be adding more information about how Howard championed movements that pushed for more women psychologists and any other forms of activism that you can find.

Tone and Balance

Is the content added neutral?: I would say that the content that is added is neutral and does a fantastic job of presenting facts.

Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?: No claims stand out as being biased toward a particular position.

Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? : No viewpoints appear to be overrepresented, or underrepresented.

Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? : There was no persuasive language or other attempts to persuade readers towards one position or another in my opinion.

Sources and References

Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?: Yes, all the new content is thoroughly sourced and reliable information.

Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? (You'll need to refer to the sources to check this.): The content appears to accurately reflect what is said in the sources

Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?: The sources appear to be thorough and reflect available literature on the topic.

Are the sources current?: The sources appear to relatively current with a number of references coming from the year 2021.

Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?: Yes, the sources are written by a very diverse spectrum of authors and include historically marginalized individuals where possible.

Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? (You may need to do some digging to answer this.) : I believe that the best possible sources have been selected for the topic.

Check a few links. Do they work?: The links do work.

Organization

Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? : Yes, the article is very well written and concise. I think maybe adding a bit more information to some sections and some slight sentence changes would be beneficial, but what is there so far is very well written.

Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?: I think the spelling and grammar is sound. I picked up on a things that could be altered.

"She considered her father's active work in the community as one of the main sources of her passion to help other people and as what influenced her work with disabled children." - maybe change the wording here to "for helping other people" and say "a primary/central influence in her work with disabled children."

"Throughout her social work, her objective was to assist children in foster care and unemployed, uneducated women." - maybe change to "Her objective was to assist children in foster care and unemployed, uneducated women throughout her social work."

maybe write "the chief psychologist of he Cleveland Board of Education" instead of "the chief psychology of Cleveland Board of Education."

maybe write "Some of her role models at the University of Minnesota" instead of "some of her role models at University of Minnesota"

"For Howard's postdoctoral studies, she collaborated with other doctors and therapists, which led to some of her publications ,  like one on play therapy" - probably insert a comma where I bolded.

Revise this: Beckham died in 1964, but their marriage, as she put it, was a "happy marriage with our profession as one of the bonds. In professional activities, as in marriage relations, we were partners". Howard continued her work in Chicago as a consultant for children's programs at the Abraham Lincoln Center and Worthington and Hurst Psychological Consultants, a psychologist for the McKinley Center for Retarded Children, on the Chicago Health Board, Mental Health Division, and her private practice for another four years.

To maybe this?: Beckham died in 1964, but Harris described their marriage as "a happy marriage with our profession as one of the bonds. In professional activities, as in marriage relations, we were partners". After her husband's death, Howard continued her work in Chicago as a consultant for children's programs at the Abraham Lincoln Center and Worthington and Hurst Psychological Consultants. And, continued to practice as a psychologist for the McKinley Center for Retarded Children, the Chicago Health Board, the Mental Health Division, and at her private practice for another four years.

Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?: The content is well organized.

Overall impressions

Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?: The content that has been added has improved the overall quality of the article. However, I think it would still be good to add more information about specific contributions that Howard has made to the field of psychology and any lasting legacy of these contributions.

What are the strengths of the content added? : I found the primary strengths of the article to be the inclusion of more references from diverse authors and the additions to the education and career section.

How can the content added be improved?: The content added can be improved by clearing up any minor grammatical errors and adding more information when possible.