User:Hannah.Morey/Face negotiation theory/Dianevanderwal Peer Review

General info
Hannah Morey (Hannah.Morey)
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Hannah.Morey/Face negotiation theory
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Face negotiation theory

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * 1) What does the article do well? Anything that impressed you?
 * 2) What changes can be made to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement?
 * 3) What's the most important change that can be made?
 * 4) Anything that could be applicable to my own article?


 * 1) I think that overall the article is very well organized. I can also appreciate that the article does provide multiple definitions and interpretations of the definition of face. The lead is well written, the only changes I'd make were already added to your sandbox! So that's awesome. Thank you very much for adding the individualism vs collectivism section in your sandbox. I noticed that the article referred to it in a very confusing/incorrect way and your evaluation is super helpful.
 * 2) I appreciate the change to the first assumption that you already made! It's more understood (with your change) that face work is cultural, yes, but everyone does it regardless of their culture. I would like to see a few examples of the assumptions. There are definitions which are helpful, but I think a real world example of each would really help for people who have never heard of this theory before. I'd suggest adding something specifically for face movements and lacework interaction strategies, as these are the hardest to understand in my opinion. A few sources are from the late 80-90s, which I think is okay (?) but any updated versions of those could likely be very helpful. As for tone and balance, I do not believe there is any opinion based language in this article.
 * 3) Overall, this article is not written at a 4th grade reading level. Which is not surprising. I think that anything you can do that will add clarification (by adding examples and more simplified definitions) would be awesome and likely greatly appreciated. Also, I noticed in Greg's article that there's a lot of images and graphics that are a lot easier to understand than the writing- if you are able to find some of those for this theory that would be awesome too.
 * 4) I will likely mirror a relatively similar organization style for my article.

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