User:HannahLH/Appropriate technology/Savannahmaria Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

HannahLH


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:HannahLH/Appropriate technology
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Appropriate technology

Evaluate the drafted changes
Your content is really strong, but some parts of the writing read as essay voice.

A sentence like "One major issue within this field is that sometimes countries can have the agricultural capabilities to be completely self-sufficient, but still have many food-insecure citizens." can be changed to something like "Some countries have the agricultural capabilities to be completely self-sufficient, but still have many food-insecure citizens." and then include examples.

Also, make sure you change your inline citations to Wikipedia style.

Good work!