User:HannahLH/Choose an Article

Article Selection
Please list articles that you're considering for your Wikipedia assignment below. Begin to critique these articles and find relevant sources.

Option 1

 * Appropriate technology
 * I think this article gives a great neutral and succinct overview of the topic. However, there are a few things that could be improved upon:
 * I think that some information in the first part could be moved down under a subhead and better serve the overall article; the first three paragraphs have a lot of good information, but some of it might fit better elsewhere in the article.
 * I'm not sure the use of "overpopulating certain areas" is true in the "Health care" subhead under "Applications". It's not clear whether that quote is properly sourced.
 * The word "recent" was used in reference to sources published in 2011 (sources [17], [38], and [59]), should the year published replace "recent"?
 * https://www.ncat.org
 * https://www.engineeringforchange.org/news/the-roots-and-implications-of-appropriate-technology/
 * https://www.ncat.org
 * https://www.engineeringforchange.org/news/the-roots-and-implications-of-appropriate-technology/

Option 2

 * Sustainable Agriculture
 * The aspect I liked most about this article was its introductory sentence because it effectively and briefly overviewed the most important parts of the topic. I also appreciated the detailed "Definition" portion of the article and the picture included at the beginning. Some suggestions I have for this article are:
 * The introduction is too short and doesn't offer a complete broad overview of the topic. This can easily be fixed by adding more information (and sources) to broaden the reader's initial understanding of the topic.
 * In the second paragraph of the introduction, the claim made in the last two sentences is not properly evidenced by the citation. This issue could be mitigated by adding additional reliable sources and possibly expanding on that idea. Also, the phrasing could be improved as well (the tone fits that of an opinion rather than a fact).
 * This "History" Section was very brief. Maybe there could be more on the initial practices within this sector (in addition to where/when the term originated)?
 * The "Ethics" portion does not give the reader enough information and there is only one citation (the second/last sentence isn't even cited). This could be fixed by further research and more citing.
 * Without any information under the "Nutrients" header, it is unclear why this is included in this article. A short paragraph that includes the reasoning here would improve the overall article.
 * Overall, this is a really detailed article, it could just use a bit more flushing out in some areas.
 * https://books.google.com/books?hl=en&lr=&id=mEm6EAAkfuMC&oi=fnd&pg=PR13&dq=sustainable+agriculture+technology&ots=zWiu3VwwEj&sig=pbe_DktXwKa2NRMFBt1Vt-EWFwA#v=onepage&q=sustainable%20agriculture%20technology&f=false
 * https://www.jstor.org/stable/24996835?seq=1
 * https://books.google.com/books?hl=en&lr=&id=mEm6EAAkfuMC&oi=fnd&pg=PR13&dq=sustainable+agriculture+technology&ots=zWiu3VwwEj&sig=pbe_DktXwKa2NRMFBt1Vt-EWFwA#v=onepage&q=sustainable%20agriculture%20technology&f=false
 * https://www.jstor.org/stable/24996835?seq=1

Option 3

 * Feed the Future Initiative
 * In the first paragraph under "Background" this article states "global hunger and chronic malnutrition/under nutrition are expected to increase in developing countries" - this is not sourced
 * The "Focus countries and partnerships" section is inaccurate/incomplete - doesn't match what the website says
 * The "Assessment" section needs significantly more information.
 * There is no mention of market creation/intervention, which the initiative is very concerned with/ their main practice
 * https://www.actionagainsthunger.org/world-hunger-facts-statistics
 * https://feedthefuture.gov
 * Flowers, Kimberly, and Onesmo Shuma. Center for Strategic and International Studies (CSIS), 2016, TRACKING PROMISES: Analyzing the Impact of Feed the Future Investments in Tanzania, www.jstor.org/stable/resrep23327.4
 * Conragan, Carol, and Kimberly Flowers. Challenges and Recommendations. Center for Strategic and International Studies (CSIS), 2017, pp. 28–31, Staying Power: Considering the U.S. Government’s Global Nutrition Coordination Plan, www.jstor.org/stable/resrep23164.10
 * Conragan, Carol, and Kimberly Flowers. Challenges and Recommendations. Center for Strategic and International Studies (CSIS), 2017, pp. 28–31, Staying Power: Considering the U.S. Government’s Global Nutrition Coordination Plan, www.jstor.org/stable/resrep23164.10

Option 4

 * Agricultural productivity
 * The discussion under "Relation to population growth" is weirdly worded and doesn't seem neutral.
 * I think the "Sustainable increases in productivity" section could be expanded.
 * 19th and 20th sources seem biased?
 * http://www.fao.org/docrep/003/X9447E/x9447e00.HTM
 * https://www.drawdown.org/solutions/sustainable-intensification-for-smallholders
 * https://www.drawdown.org/solutions/sustainable-intensification-for-smallholders

Option 5

 * History of fertilizer
 * This article has a heavy emphasis on European and North American history, with NOTHING about other parts of the word :(
 * Even the North American parts are only in relation to modern market share with Europe - nothing about First Nation peoples
 * The intro for this article promises a lot more information than the rest of the article delivers
 * https://www.jstor.org/stable/1740002
 * https://www.jstor.org/stable/20028312?origin=crossref&seq=1#metadata_info_tab_contents
 * https://www.jstor.org/stable/20028312?origin=crossref&seq=1#metadata_info_tab_contents