User:HannahLH/Sustainable agriculture/Lin.jaide Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

HannahLH


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:HannahLH/Sustainable agriculture
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sustainable agriculture

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead
The lead section was updated and includes a clear and concise summarization of the reasoning behind the growing popularity of sustainable agriculture — one potential clarification that you could add is that the planet's "carrying capacity" is in terms of space and/or specific resources rather than solely mentioning the quantity of human lives and society.

Content
The content is detailed and properly contextualizes the introduction of sustainable agriculture with historical examples and developments, as well as highlights some popular solutions or recommendations in public conversation on how to meet the needs of a growing population. Some potential additions to the "History" section edits include:

- Contextualizing where exactly are efforts in sustainable agriculture concentrated (ie. developing economies, existing commercialized agriculture, small family-run farms, etc.)

- How exactly this may tie in with other historical themes (ex. Industrialization, commodification and commercialization of marketable goods and produce, etc.)

- More time markers to show how the debate on sustainable agriculture may have evolved over a period of time.

Tone and Balance
Overall there was definitely an encyclopedic tone to the writing, especially for the "History" section where more time-specific information on popular discourse and debate is being described — however, the addition to "Social factors" under the "Rural economic development" section treads a bit closely to an opinion piece. While I agree with the assessment as well on proper methods to sustainable agriculture, I believe this can potentially be edited to examine the exact effects of an "unrestricted market" to allow the reader to develop their own opinion on the costs/payoffs of such solutions.

Sources and References
The links look fine and the references are properly cited and included — the papers are also readily accessible online so the sources should be fully usable.

Organization
Overall the draft edits and additions are structured and well-organized; the changes are highlighted in the lead section properly and the flow of the article is well-maintained with the new changes.

Images and Media
N/A (ie. edits did not include images and media)

Overall Impressions
Overall, I believe that these draft edits were well-organized and thought out; besides some tweaks to the tone and wording of certain sections to ensure a more encyclopedic tone (ie. contextualizing why some methods such as free-market trade and agriculture commodification may, in fact, be detrimental to sustainable agriculture) the new changes should be fully usable within the Wikipedia article. Nice work! :)