User:Hannahbanka26/Agricultural microbiology/Nurgul Ozkisi Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Hannahbanka26


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Hannahbanka26/Agricultural_microbiology?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Agricultural microbiology

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead  The lead of my peers' wikipedia article did not include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article’s topic since it is about fertilisers not about agricultural microbiology. On the account of not having an introduction, starting the page with fertilisers and biofertilizers, which is two subheadings, confuses the reader and lowers the quality of the page. My peer chose to disregard the introduction from the current version and talk about fertiliser without a proper introduction sentence for the main topic. I would suggest that you should work on the introduction from the current version as it should provide a clear overview of what agricultural microbiology is, what its significance is, and what the article will cover. If it is concise but informative it will engage the reader. The edited article does not contain sections, it really helps for the organisation of the article to add more sections.

Content The content of my peer’s article is relevant to the topic and the added information is up to date. There is some content that is missing which could improve the articles overall purpose as well as audience engagement. Some of the topics that you can include are various aspects of agricultural microbiology, such as the role of microorganisms in soil health, plant-microbe interactions, and biotechnology applications. The content added by my peer is very informative; however, adding more contextual information on the history and development of agricultural microbiology that includes key discoveries and milestones in the field can benefit the article. Last two paragraphs that are in the draft are very informative, adding citations to these sentences can improve the credibility of the article. Moreover, the picture added to the article is a good addition to page organisation. It helps to visualise the concepts discussed in the article. Additionally, I would recommend expanding the examples section from the current version of the article by adding examples of application of agricultural microbiology in crop production, livestock management, and environmental remediation that can help exhibit the importance and impact of the field.

Tone and Balance The overall tone of this article is neutral and informative. From the analysis of the article it can be observed that there is an absence of any persuasive claims that are intended to sway the reader towards a particular viewpoint or belief. The article presents information in a neutral and objective manner, without attempting to influence the reader's opinions or attitudes towards the subject matter. The language used in the article is factual and informative, providing a comprehensive overview of the topic of agricultural microbiology.The author does not express any biases or attempt to sway the reader towards a particular position. The focus of the article is on presenting the facts and information in a clear and concise manner, without any undue influence or manipulation. Therefore, it can be concluded that the revised article is written in a balanced and unbiased tone, with the aim of providing the reader with an accurate and objective understanding of the subject.

Sources and References The references cited in the article appear to be relevant and appropriate for the topic of biofertilizers. They include both older and more recent sources, which provides a comprehensive overview of the subject. Content accurately reflects what the cited source says. The use of a book as a reference also adds to the credibility of the article. However, it would be helpful to include more recent research studies or articles to provide more up-to-date information on the topic. Additionally, it would be beneficial to include in-text citations for the references used in the article. It would also be really helpful to add citations for the last two paragraphs of the article, since they contain important information. The references are written by a diverse spectrum of authors this adds to the robustness and validity of the article’s content. All of the links that are cited work.

General spelling and grammar In general there is not a lot of grammar and spelling error. However some of the small touches can improve the overall article in a better way. Which some of them includes: "Bio fertiilizers" should be spelled as "Biofertilizers" throughout the article for consistency.In the sentence "They contain organic and artificial chemicals that are released into the soil and crops to sustain an environment or expel lost chemicals", the use of "expel lost chemicals" is unclear and could be rephrased for better clarity. Also "vegetativeness" is not a commonly used word,Instead, you could use "growth" or "development" of plants.