User:Hannahcatesilver/Chinese ideals of female beauty/Rachelchaban Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Hannahcatesilver


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Hannahcatesilver/Chinese_ideals_of_female_beauty?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Chinese ideals of female beauty

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead


 * You have made huge improvements to the lead.
 * Your lead does include a description of what your article will be about as well as the sections included in the article.
 * Your lead does include information about some types of beauty standards that aren't mentioned in the article. If you are looking to expand any additional content, you could definitely expand on some of these.
 * Your lead seems pretty concise. I do think that you should make the part where you talk about the ideas of attraction in your lead part of it.

Content


 * Your content that you added is relevant to the topic of your article that you have chosen.
 * The content appears to come from sources that seem somewhat recent. One source that was used was from 2008, but there was also a source from 2018 and another from 2022.
 * There is some content that you have included that is the same from the original article; however, I thought maybe you weren't completely finished with those sections yet.
 * I do believe that your contributions have helped this topic; however, I feel like since beauty is such a huge topic around the world today that you might be able to find some more sources with more recent information.

Tone and Balance


 * The information that you have added doesn't seem to include any bias.

Sources and References


 * From what I read, most of your content has a reliable source cited; however, there are a few things you have added that haven't been cited. For example, there are two sentences in your lead that haven't been cited.
 * The sources you have chosen are somewhat recent, but like I mentioned previously, I believe there might be some more recent sources that cover the topic of beauty.
 * Every time I tried to click on a link in your reference section, it asked if I wanted to delete or edit, so I wasn't able to check if your links all work or not. It appears that you need to check the date on two of your sources.

Organization


 * Overall, what you have added is very informative and concise, as well as organized.
 * I did see some spelling errors in your Lead section in the sentence where you included a definition of the idea of attractiveness.

Overall Impressions


 * The content you have added has certainly made the article more complete, especially with all that you have added to the lead section which in the original article was only one sentence.
 * The strengths of the content you added certainly add to the article by making it more complete and by using recent sources.
 * As for how your content can be improved, there are several sections that you have put into your sandbox to edit, but they didn't appear to have been edited compared to the original article. I also think you could try to see if there are any other recent sources for this topic. Overall, I think you have done a great job!