User:Hannahmcfadden/Speech-language pathology/CarsonJones06 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Hannahmcfadden


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
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 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Speech–language pathology

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead Section:

While Hannah has not added the material that she added to other sections to the lead section. It already has a good introductory sentence and summarizes the article well. The lead section is not overly detailed.

Content:

The content that Hannah has added is very relevant to the topic in giving more detail and perspective of the speech pathologists in the disability sidebar and explaining their role in speech-language pathology. While also including more details on their profession and the important role they play in helping people who are struggling to communicate in various forms. She also provides important information about the assessment procedure that Speech pathologists go through in identifying what would be best for kids that are struggling with speech-language issues. The content is up to date. I do think Hannah would benefit from adding information about speech-language pathology in different cultures and other places not privileged by western civilization to provide more of a broad global perspective. I know the information might not be out there with reliable sources, but it would strengthen the article and address an equity gap.

Tone and Balance:

Hannah does a great job at keeping a neutral tone that does not have any claims that are favored to one opinion over another. She does not try to persuade the reader; she does a great job at abiding by Wikipedia's guidelines with the content she has added.

Sources:

Her sources are great secondary sources that transcribe the information she has added. The sources are current and relevant to her added content. The authors are diverse from looking at their information presented, and the topics covered. I do think she would benefit from adding sources that talk about speech-language problems in other cultures. The links work.

Organization:

Content is added in the right places and added more details to the sections she has helped elaborate on. There does not seem to be grammatical or spelling errors. Content she has added is well organized and placed in the right sections and the right places to help expand this article.

Overall Impressions:

Hannah's contributions have added valuable detail and information to this page in expanding on the role speech-language pathologists play in kids that struggle with language and communication issues. The strengths of this article are the relevant sources and content she has added to this page and her ability to be neutral in her content she has added. Improvements include just adding more information to the sections that are lacking (like the research section), I also think adding information addressing Wikipedia's equity gaps (if the reliable information is out there) would benefit her contributions and the article itself. Maybe some details in the lead section.