User:Hanshenli/Independent and identically distributed random variables/Joannetsai Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Hanshenli


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Hanshenli/Independent_and_identically_distributed_random_variables?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Independent and identically distributed random variables

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * 1) There are two confusing proper noun words in the topic, and I couldn't get to know what do these two words mean when I tried to find it out in the first paragraph. It would be great to briefly explain what do "independent" and "identically" in the title mean in the very first paragraph of the article. This topic is hard to understand at first sight, so I think it would be helpful to give some comments to the topic in the first paragraph.
 * 2) The examples in the current version are too simple. As mentioned above, this is not an intuitive topic, so the readers might need a lot of elaborate examples that can assist them in understanding this topic. However, the examples in the current article are way too simple. For example, "A sequence of fair or loaded dice rolls is i.i.d", this is all in this example. It would be helpful to develop some interpretation about this examples. For instance, telling us what in the dice rolls have to do with independence and what is identical. This dice rolls thing might serve as a great example, because dice rolls is easy to understand and is a prevalent example in probability. It would be a pity that it's not elaborated well.