User:Happyhelper775/Comprehensive sex education/Jjennings23 Peer Review

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Happyhelper775


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Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: Within the history section, it is really strong with great information. I think it would be nice to have a paragraph or two at the beginning giving background on the topic. I thought it was very concise and detailed. It was organized and flowed well for the rest of the article.

Content: I didn't recognize any content missing other than what was is going on with sex education within Biden's administration and his policies. I think that might be something to add. I will say the content is well written. the content is also up-to-date.

Tone and Balance: tone was very neutral, when reading other articles outside of the class you can tell which side the author has leaned towards. I thought you brought forth good balance ideas from both sides of the argument.

Sources and References: I thought your sources were nice and formatted well. I think maybe a few more might be nice and give more points of reference.

Organization: It was very concise as I stated before and easy to read without any spelling or grammatical errors.

Image and Media: I didn't see any images or media and don't think it would be necessary. A suggestion if you would like to add images could be of any legislation documents regarding this topic.

Overall: I think you did a great job, I just think there should be a background section.