User:Hart2me/Green Tobacco Sickness/Mcwillaa Peer Review

General info
Hart2me
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Hart2me/Green Tobacco Sickness - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Green Tobacco Sickness - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
The article that Hart2me is editing is currently a stub, so it requires top to bottom edits, including the lead section. Understandably, she is not finished with her edits so I don't want to assume in my review that her current edits are the only edits so will be making to the page, however, I will comment any suggestions I may have for improvement to her existing edits.

Hart2me has added a definition of "Green Tobacco" to the article, which is an appropriate and useful edit. I think the lead section would benefit from mentioning the shift in production to developing nations in the past decades, as these leads into the section she has added "Populations at risk".

In the "Populations at risk" section, I would expand on the regions where tobacco production is largest: China, Brazil, India, The United States, and Malawi. The citation for that information I provided, it is a systematic review article of tobacco production worldwide and definitely would be useful for the bibliography.

I think for media and images, a visual for green tobacco and for the type of protective suits worn would be useful to enhance understanding.

In addition to "Prevention" depending on the amount of sources you have, you can either change it to "Prevention and Treatment" or have a new section for treatment. Also it would be good to mention the impact of heat and heat related illness and how it can impact GTS. I found one source here about potential therapeutics:


 * McMahon, Lance R. (2019-03-04). "Green tobacco sickness: mecamylamine, varenicline, and nicotine vaccine as clinical research tools and potential therapeutics". Expert Review of Clinical Pharmacology. 12 (3): 189–195. doi:10.1080/17512433.2019.1570844. ISSN 1751-2433

Overall, I think this is a difficult topic due to scarcity of information already online, however, I think Hart2me has made a good start. I found some additional sources that I thought might be useful for her below:


 * Recommended practices: green tobacco sickness (Report). U.S. Department of Health and Human Services, Public Health Service, Centers for Disease Control and Prevention, National Institute for Occupational Safety and Health. 2015-03-01. doi:10.26616/nioshpub2015104
 * This is a PDF from NIOSH that details some of the protective measures that would be useful for your "Prevention" section as well as some of the current regulations in the United States that could be useful.
 * McKnight, Robert H.; Spiller, Henry A. (2005). "Green Tobacco Sickness in Children and Adolescents". Public Health Reports. 120 (6): 602–606. ISSN 0033-3549. PMC 1497768. PMID 16350329.
 * This is an overview of the existing literature about GTS in children, which might be useful if you find sufficient evidence of child labor in the industry (which I suspect you will, particularly as the industry has shifted to developing nations).
 * McBride, J.; Altman, D.; Klein, M.; White, W. (1998-09). "Green tobacco sickness". Tobacco Control. 7 (3): 294–298. ISSN 0964-4563. PMC 1763894. PMID 9825425.
 * This article is a little bit old, however, it might be a good starting point for some statistical evidence on the medical costs of GTS as well as the incidence rates.

I'm sure you have already considered many if not most of these things, but hopefully it was helpful!