User:Haw11967/Corynebacterium diphtheriae/Ccd38148 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Haw11967


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Haw11967/Corynebacterium_diphtheriae?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Corynebacterium diphtheriae

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Not sure if the draft has already been published to the article...I am writing this as if it has been updated to the article page

- Lead = current intro sentence is clear; no description of upcoming sections to be read

- Content =

classification section is good and explains how to classify; metachromatic /polar granules are a bit confusing; add photo of classification?

pathogen and disease section should have linked pages; otherwise good to show how disease occurs; slightly redundant with the pathogenesis section; consider breaking down Pathogen and Disease with paragraph breaks

pathogenesis section is good; photo could help

treatment: discuss how the bacterium is sensitive (how do antibiotics fight it)

genetics: consider discussing replication and how it increases population?

- Tone and Balance = good, appears to be neutral

- No spelling errors, well-organized

- content has improved the article!

- good references