User:Hayelizabeth24/Bulimia Nervosa/Bdlogan90 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Hayelizabeth24


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Hayelizabeth24/Bulimia_Nervosa?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Bulimia nervosa

Evaluate the drafted changes
First of all I think you picked a very interesting subject. Although a lot of people may feel they know what Bulimia Nervosa is or at least have a general idea there is always more to learn. The article chosen I must say has a very strong presence. Many have added to it over time thus offering a lot of material to critique. I feel your time can mainly be spent combing through the article making minor revision and additions. I wouldn't say this article needs a major overhaul. It has a strong lead with good background information as well as heavily supported subtopics. So once again, I would stress going over it in great detail to see are there things that can be taken out. Or are there places where the information can be relayed more concisely? At times reading through the article I felt that some wording was extra and the article could survive without it. Like take this following sentence for example: "People with bulimia are more likely than people without bulimia to have an affective disorder, " I get what is being said but I feel like it may benefit from rewording instead of the way it is written now. My main reason for telling you that you shouldn't set out to write a whole new article is that this one has a solid foundation. So you can put more effort and time into tweaking smaller parts through out the article. I hope you enjoy exploring the world of Bulimia more in depth.