User:Hayelizabeth24/Bulimia Nervosa/Dauryn Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Hayelizabeth24


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Editing User:Hayelizabeth24/Bulimia Nervosa - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Bulimia nervosa - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

I really enjoy the tone of the paragraph and how concise and accurate it is to the original article. I believe the paragraph could improve even more if it was cohesive. The definition of BN is shown through DSM-5 but the definition provided does not seem to be objective. For example, "constant episodes of binge eating, eating at random times and large amounts of food, lack of control, disliking gaining weight (making themselves throw up, etc." is not very objective and can be changed into "constant episode of binge eating through out the day in large quantities, loss of self-control, and fear of gaining weight resulting in purging food out". I think it would be better if the description/definition was more objective instead of adding vocabulary such as "random" and "disliking". Also, there are other forms of purging such as abusing laxatives, including the word "purging" allows the reader to know that people with BN do not just induce vomiting. I also noticed how the links to the references are not embedded. The article would be more aesthetically pleasing if the links were embedded instead of just being added to the end of the sentences. You can learn how to embedd the links through the article in the previous lessons on citing articles. Other than that, the paragraph was very informative!