User:HaylAtk23/Virtual reality in nursing/Mcguirp Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

HaylAtk23


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:HaylAtk23/Virtual_reality_in_nursing?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Virtual reality in nursing

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Lead
Guiding questions:

There is a lead here that works well, but it is in the second paragraph. The lead statement - Virtual Reality could be included in the second paragraph which acts as a better lead.
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?

No, but this could be added easily in one sentence. This would be a good idea to give the reader an overall impression of what the article is about. no The lead is not overly detailed, but could add a summary statement. Adding the video here is an excellent idea.
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Content
Guiding questions:

Yes, the content is relevant and interesting. The subsections are all very current and full of new information. Yes, especially the sections on Covid and mental health. This shows that the author has researched from current materials and has a very good grasp of the central issues. Sometimes there are statements that refer to important information from other sources. I think some of that information should be included in the article. For example:
 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?

Health Tech Magazine reports how nursing education can be managed during a pandemic through the use of virtual reality technology no
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics?

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:

yes, this is done very well. none that I can see again, the article is a good report on new technology, I don't see any bias against traditional means of training, this article just explains there are now new ways to do the same work. no
 * Is the content added neutral?
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

Sources and References
Guiding questions:

Most of the content is backed up with secondary sources. However there are some statements that need references. Here is one as an example:
 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?

''With much of CPR training done in large groups, in small classrooms there is a dwindling number of offerings, this was highlighted during the COVID-19 pandemic when limitations on group events took place. The hope is to utilize virtual reality technology to still bring high quality CPR training to learners regardless of the physical environment.''

Also, are the videos added to the references? I do not see this link in the references:

''The following is a presentation titled “The Use of Immersive Virtual Reality to Enhance Mental Health Assessment Skills” which was presented at a Simulation Symposium. The presentation explores how virtual reality can be used to develop and enhance nursing students mental health skills.'' It is hard to check this because there are no active links to the articles. The reference section will need to be fixed so the references can be checked out. Yes, the articles seem to be. I think the videos should all be included as references as well. yes, almost all the articles are 2019 or 2020 - very good! Yes, each article is from a different author (or authors) All the journals are different and include articles from different parts of the world (Korea) This seems to be a very diverse collection of material. These articles all look peer reviewed, but at this time it is hard to know for sure. The links at this point do not work.
 * Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? (You'll need to refer to the sources to check this.)
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * Are the sources current?
 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?
 * Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? (You may need to do some digging to answer this.)
 * Check a few links. Do they work?

Organization
Guiding questions:

This needs some work. Some of the sentences need rewriting and there are some typos in the text. It would be good for the writer to share this with someone to get some ideas on how to make the copy read well. For example:
 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?

''Nursing education compasses (encompasses) the theory and practical skills required to safely practice as a nurse. This education comes from classroom education through traditional textbooks, labs for skill based learning and clinical placements, where students get practical patient exposure and experience. (This sentence is awkward and should be rewritten)''

The following are a list example where virtual reality can be incorporated to elevate nursing education(need a colon:) Yes, there are some typos and some sentences do not have periods. Examples:
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?

''Through this technology scenarios can be created and learns can work with mental health interactions in a safe an controlled environment. ''

Health Tech Magazine reports how nursing education can be managed during a pandemic through the use of virtual reality technology (This statement should also be expanded upon - how can nursing education be expanded upon?) yes, this is well done, good breakdown of categories
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media

no, but this would be an interesting addition to the article
 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is for a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.

Yes, based on my reading of the Notability requirements, this article meets the criteria. This could be improved by adding references for the videos and presentations that are used in the article. For example, this article should be included in the references Health Tech Magazine Looking at similar articles (Virtual Reality), there needs to be more links to technical terms in the article for example - Cardiopulmonary Resuscitation, Nurse education, Covid-19 see comment above, this could be improved
 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:

It is all new information, it is relevant and interesting. This is an important topic now especially as we do more remote learning. Good topic choice. Adding more references would be good - as mentioned above. This article lends itself to visual content, so some should be added. Possibly as a concluding paragraph something on the future of virtual reality in nursing?
 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * How can the content added be improved?