User:Hayleebilbray/sandbox/My sandbox

Reflections

 * 1) I decided on a title that was straight-forward and to the point so that the reader knows exactly what they are getting into. This is a suitable title according to the guidelines.
 * 2) My lead section seems to be factual and well cited, but could probably use a little work on the word choice to make sure it is non-bias. In addition, my reference list could be formatted better, but i have not figured out how to edit the citation.
 * 3) I have not selected any topic headings for my article, because the sources are light. I have searched the library database, Tampa Bay Times and St. Petersburg Times, while i found valuable sources in the research,  I feel that the information is not dense enough to separate it into separate headings.
 * 4) My reference list includes mostly news articles, but that is mostly all I could find. Maybe I could get some pointer on other refernce website to braden my article for the final draft.
 * 5) For my final draft, I want to add an accurate content box. I have not been able to figure that out yet. I would also like to learn how to fix the dates on the citations (since i had to write them manually). I would also like an evaluation of my choice of wording and content (just to make sure I am making everyone happy).

Article Evaluation: Tone
Overall, the author seems to attempt to keep the article neutral but fails in a few instances. First, her word choice in the first sentence of the chapter 6 analysis displays diction favorable towards Rankine's attempt at engaging empathy in the reader. In conjunction, the author of this article displays bias when they say, " In addition, in this passage the author gave a hidden answer to the question of racism. The author used second person as an argument and way of pointing fingers to denunciate an ongoing injustice of human segregations. Rankine used these continued passages as a reminder of the black American history that continues to exist in this century." This is bias, because she exclaims that the author has provided an "answer", but that is only in the writes opinion, not of known fact.

Review
I agree with the above statement. The article provides a fair amount of information, however there is a lack of neutrality and unbiased voice. I think it would be great to add in something about human rights within the academic environment, at all levels. The author states when the law was passed and describes the law a little bit, but I believe their could be an expansion of the law. Possibly breaking the law up into three separate parts and expanding on those parts and provide more information about how they're apart of that law. "This law added sexual orientation as a protected status in housing, employment, and public accommodations." For instance, how is sexual orientation a protected status in housing? How is it a protected status in employment? How is it a protected status in public accommodations? This article and the article for Equality Florida can have links to each others pages for referencing.

Research Notes, 9/25
Hi Haylee! You have been assigned to write an article on the St. Petersburg Human Rights Ordinance. This topic is not yet covered by Wikipedia, though it is mentioned in an article on the LGBTQ rights advocacy organization, Equality Florida. Here are your research notes from class on 9/25:


 * What is the law?
 * Reasoning of why it was passed

Another Post-It I found (not sure who was the author) notes: "Interesting because there is no info on it and it was an important law that added sexual orientation as a protect status in housing, accommodations, and employment in St. Pete."

-Professor Hagood