User:Hazelanon/Eustochium/Mitm0412 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Hazelanon


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Hazelanon/Eustochium?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Eustochium

Evaluate the drafted changes
Content


 * The edits in the article body are clear to read since they are bolded which made it easy to pick out.
 * Although the edits throughout the article are short, they provide necessary information that was not stated in the previous article.
 * In 417, a crowd of ruffians attacked and pillaged the monasteries of Bethlehem, destroying one of them by fire, besides killing and maltreating some of the residents. It is alleged[4] that this was instigated by John II, the Patriarch of Jerusalem, and the Pelagians against whom Jerome had written what were considered sharp polemics. Both Jerome and Eustochium informed Pope Innocent I by letter of the occurrence, who severely reproved the patriarch for having permitted the outrage. Eustochium died shortly after and was succeeded in the supervision of the convents by her niece, the younger Paula. Eustochius of Tour might have been her nephew, and further lateral descendants may include Perpetuus and Volusianus.[5] The Catholic Church celebrates her feast on 28 September.


 * I’m not sure if this section was added to be edited later on but there seem to be no changes made yet in the sandbox draft.
 * Each edit has a source attached and is composed of unbiased comments.

Sources and references


 * All of the sources link work.
 * Sources 1, 2, and 4  are all backed by other sources. Source 3 seems to be from a museum website and I cannot find the resources they used.
 * The sources that are used are relevant to the article and are up to date for the subject.

Overall Impression


 * The content provided has improved the overall article, I would just add more edits if possible throughout the paragraphs.
 * The strengths are the way the comments are written, they are purely factual and don’t use language that is trying to direct an opinion at you.