User:Hazelsvest/Scarab (artifact)/EdieJones71 Peer Review

General info
Hazelsvest
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Hazelsvest/Scarab (artifact)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Scarab (artifact)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: Could be broken up a bit. The lead can include a quick description of the scarabs, but maybe the rest of the information could form or be included in another section (i.e. dating and location).

Clarity: Information is clear, but it remains mostly unaltered (which isn't necessarily a bad thing). Clarification on why the Uluburun Shipwreck is included in the religious significance section. Could it be moved somewhere else or is there a way to more clearly connect it to the section? Picture included of Khepri is lot more useful in the religious section,

Coverage: Description could use a picture or two.

Neutrality: Information is neutral and unspeculating.

Sources: I appreciate you refernecing sources in the sections you worked on. You could maybe pull in a couple more sources to use in the article.