User:Hb56030/Bacteroides thetaiotaomicron/Writtenwall Peer Review

General info
Brimibo2, GoldenRetriever18, Hb56030
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Hb56030/Bacteroides_thetaiotaomicron?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Bacteroides thetaiotaomicron

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)


 * Quality improvements to the organization/structure
 * Being very nitpicky, some of the wording feels a little stilted in this section
 * Lots of quality information added to the metabolism section
 * The sentence "In fact, they have been proven to be the major organisms to break down plant polysaccharides, as well as host-derived products in the colon" in particular is hard to understand and feels vague in terms of the host-derived products
 * Really good job of identifying the right content to add, the sections feel much more filled out
 * Continue to do this with the next section
 * Only major complaint is to make the make sure new content doesn't get too confusing or awkward, all content is relevant and adds depth to the article
 * Article likely needs at least one to two pictures