User:Heckmaad2523/Artificial intelligence of things/SierraMulhern Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Heckmaad2523


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Heckmaad2523/Artificial intelligence of things - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Artificial intelligence of things - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
Really great job breaking down the lead into different sections to make the article easier to read and follow. I might take a simpler approach with the word choice to just make it a little easier to read. EX. "been a number of waves of optimism, followed by disappointments, funding loss, and new approaches, success, and renewed funding." This could be shortened or broken down. There's a couple other lines like this too that just need to be revised. There seem to be plenty of sources and citations and they are well organized. Good job! A cool picture find but I would describe what the picture is of rather then what it represents. Overall it's thorough and well organized, just a little wordy and reads a little more as scientific writing over science writing and just needs to be simplified.