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Practice Editing Here (Nov 15th in-class Wiki session work)
== Amyloidosis ==


 * This is a place to practice clicking the "edit" button and practice adding references (via the citation button).

Task:


 * 1) Find a peer-reviewed journal article on PubMed. Practice inserting your citation in the above space using the "cite" tool
 * 2) Choose one "B-level" medical article on Wikipedia from the following list: https://wp1.openzim.org/#/project/Medicine/articles?quality=B-Class&importance=High-Class
 * 3) Practice editing live on Wikipedia by finding a typo in the text or improving the clarity/readability of a sentence by adjusting a few words in a sentence.

Assignment # 3- please post an anonymous copy here!
Current sentence: Adding in addition to the currently written section.

Actual proposed change: Accumulation of amyloid proteins in the gastrointestinal system may be caused by a wide range of amyloid disorders and have different presentations depending on the degree of organ involvement. Potential symptoms include weight loss, diarrhea, abdominal pain, heartburn (gastrointestinal reflux), and GI bleeding. Amyloidosis may also affect accessory digestive organs including the liver, and may present with jaundice, fatty stool, anorexia, fluid buildup in the abdomen, and spleen enlargement.

Rationale for proposed change: Currently, the signs and symptoms for the “liver” section includes mostly GI related issues. In addition to changing the subheading, I will also include the clinical presentation for GI/Liver associated amyloidosis. The current section talks about the pathophysiology of the disease, rather than focusing on the signs/symptoms. This addition will give a more general overview of GI-related signs and symptoms of amyloidosis before talking about more specific cases.

Area of Controversy: The above suggestions are specific to gastrointestinal amyloidosis. It does not necessarily encompass all forms of amyloidosis. The original subheading specified liver presentation, however much of the content under that subheading applies broadly to gastrointestinal symptoms. We also propose potentially changing the subheading to GI which seems more appropriate considering the content existing already in the subheading.

Critique of source: There are not many critiques of the paper, however even within this paper, very little has been elucidated on the symptoms within the liver. Within the clinical symptoms section of the paper, the symptoms were only listed without details on specifics of each symptom. The author’s could have expanded on each symptom to reflect the percentages of amyloidosis patients that exhibit these symptoms or specific demographics who were more likely to develop said symptoms

What to post on the Wikipedia article talk page (part of assignment 3)

 * This will also be covered on Nov 15th in class. Your group should use the below template to share an outline of your proposed improvements (including your new wording and citations). Article talk pages are not places to share your assignment answers. The Wikipedia community will be more interested in viewing your exact article improvement suggestions including where you plan to improve the article (which section), what wording you suggest, and the exact citation (Note: all citations must meet WP:MEDRS)
 * You will not be able to paste citations directly from your sandbox to talk pages (unless you are interested in editing/learning Wiki-code in the "source editing" mode). We suggest re-adding your citations on the talk page manually (using the cite button and populating the citation by pasting in the DOI, website, or PMID). You will have to repeat this process yet again when you edit the actual article live.
 * Talk Page Template: CARL Medical Editing Initiative/Fall 2021/Talk Page Template