User:Herbe1mg/Beembe tribe (Kongo)/Fmsrlyams Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Herbe1mg


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Beembe Tribe (Kongo)


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Beembe Tribe (Kongo)

Evaluate the drafted changes
There isn't a defined lead/intro/overview in the article yet, which is fine, but going off of the first paragraph as a stand-in for a lead paragraph, there is some good information being added. I will say that some of the information seems like it can either be consolidated or moved to sections that can be added in the future, as the current lead paragraph is a bit too detailed. I think some of the information can go into a "history" section or "government" section while keeping a brief overview of the rest of the article. I highly recommend adding sections/headers first and then working out the organization for the information rather than trying to sort everything out from a large paragraph. Further added content is concise and sourcing issues/citations are either being addressed or are going to be addressed within the article. The information looks to be in line with sources as well as the other information as it relates to the article. Sources that were added look credible and up to date as well as being diverse. There are a good amount of sources as well and the content seems to hold its own in terms of accuracy across them. The content is neutral and professional and does not give off a bias of any sort that I could pick up on. The first added sentence is a little off in terms of grammatical formatting, as well as small little typos/errors here and there in some of the added information. The organization is still being worked on, but it seems you have an idea and a structure in mind once more information has been gathered. This article is well on its way and there are many good ideas and plans being made within your sandbox. Keep up the good work!