User:Herbe1mg/Beembe tribe (Kongo)/Vrede1mp Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Herbe1mg


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Herbe1mg/Beembe_tribe_%28Kongo%29?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Beembe tribe (Kongo)

Evaluate the drafted changes
It looks like a lot of valuable information was added to the lead section of the wiki page. The lead section includes information on the location of the Beembe and references the subgroups within the tribe. It also mentions the colonization of the tribe by the French. The lead very briefly gives a slight outline of what information will be included within the page. The article has sections on cultural traditions, Beembe figures, and body markings. The lead does mention that Beembe's art does separate them from other tribes, specifically the Kongo, which is mentioned once more in Beembe Fiqures. The lead section is clear and well-written. The general facts added do help the reader understand basic information about the group and give an idea of where they are located.

The content added to the page was relevant to the topic. The information was mainly added to the lead section and Beembe Fiqures. The author added a section about Body Markings. This does seem like relevant information, as the author describes the importance of it within the tribe. There could be more information in each section. At the end of the page, the author left a note on information they are trying to work on, as well as notes throughout the sections. The topics and notes seem related to each other and will read well once done.

The author did a good job of maintaining a balanced and neutral tone within the information they added. There were no claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position. Nor does the information added seem to attempt to persuade the reader in favor of anything.

The information the author added is backed by two sources that seem reliable. For what was added to each section, the sources reflect the content. In some of the notes left by the author, the sources originally used don't seem reliable and will go back to change the information or source.

The organization of the content added is headed in the right direction. It is well-written and easy to read. Starting with the cultural traditions, then expanding on the traditions is a good thing. The Body Markings section could be moved up as it is more of a cultural tradition. Then focusing on the art afterward can be a good rearrangement. Even if that doesn't change, the article still reads well.

Overall, the content added has improved the overall quality of the article.