User:Heyitsjami/Campus sexual assault/Legaleagle2022 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Heyitsjami


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Campus sexual assault
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Campus sexual assault

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: Add links to the terms "sexual assault" and "harassment" for clarification. Consider adding "rape" to the lead sentence since its is discussed later in the paragraph.

Tone and balance: These are just suggestions, but maybe discuss male sexual assault within the same sequence of sentence where you discuss sexual assault statistics by group (e.g. female undergraduate students and female LGBTQ+). Also, some suggested language tweaks: rather than saying "at high risk of being victimized" why not say "at high risk of becoming victims"; instead of "LGBTQ+ community are deemed to be at the highest risk" why not say "LGBTQ+ community are at the highest risk," etc.

Sources and Reference: source the first sentence and second to last sentence. Also, need more legal sources. The following are some suggested subtopics you might discuss that can pull in more legal resources. Are there any measures that the legislature is taking or could be taking to remedy this issue (proposed legislation, laws, regulations)? What are they? Are there any discrepancies between state and federal action concerning this issue? What are they? If legislation exists, has there been calls its reform? To what extent are these cases being prosecuted? Is it a priority for prosecutors (state/federal)? If not, what are the reasons? How do prosecutors handle these issues? etc.

First Source: cite to the actual study that references this statistic. The link cites to a page of various   statistics which does not include the actual statistic used.

Second Source: not open source, unable to check.

Third Source: not open source.

Fourth Source: not open source.

Fifth Source: the citation is to a database. Cite to actual study.

Sixth Source: looks like the statistic is 12.5% for men.