User:Hez28/Lake Lucerne/Wittlj Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Hez28)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Hez28/Lake Lucerne


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Lake Lucerne

Evaluate the drafted changes
Some general housekeeping:


 * Rename the article draft to Limnology or Lake Ecology (or something related).
 * I recommend adding some headings to break up your paragraphs and make it read easier. For example, your third paragraph could be under the header "watershed". To do this, you change "Paragraph" on the toolbar to "Heading".
 * Also, try linking some key terms like fjord, olgitrophic, and meromictic so that others that are not limnologists can know what you are talking about without you having to define these terms (you can link really easily by just highlighting the term and hitting the link button on the tool bar above- fjord lake).
 * You have some in text citations that are not needed. Since you already have them linked below, I think you can just delete the in text citations. Like (Keller B, 2021).
 * Some of your sources are repeated in your references (like the lakepedia source). You only want them to show up once. When citing them with the "Cite tool, you can re-use sources, and then it will add all of them under the same one. If you need an example of this, my lake is Lake Okechobee and I reuse a lot of my sources. It should be linked here: User:Wittlj/Lake Okeechobee. An example if my second reference- I have it linked in both my lead and my second paragraph.

Overall, your lead is pretty good. You do repeat a lot that is already stated in the Lake Lucerne wiki (like lake elevation and size) so if you can find other limnological information that has not been already stated in that original wiki, then I would try and add that to your lead. But I also understand that it is difficult to find more information that has not already been used. But in general, I feel like your lead gives some nice background and highlights what you are going to talk about pretty well. Just a heads up, your first sentence of your lead is not grammatically correct but it should be an easy fix.

A lot of what you have in regards to its irregular shape and four basins is also talked about in the original wiki article. As I said with your lead, if you can I recommend finding more information that is not already stated in the original article.

Your content seems fairly neutral and mostly up to date. You do have some grammatical errors throughout and could change some wording to improve readability, but in general your information looks good and is sectioned well. If you want help with some grammar stuff, I would be happy to help but I figured I would review bigger picture things.

The image you tried to add got removed so make sure you fix that before the end. Also caption the image if you can.

In general, great job! You are at about 800 words, so remember to add about 200 more before you finish. If you have any questions, feel free to ask me.