User:Hfarrugia21/Architecture in Morocco/AbigailLynnArts Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Hfarrugia21, Shea.leb, Smancione


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Hfarrugia21/Architecture_in_Morocco?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * No article? Building from Scratch

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi!

I think you have a lot of cool info and topics to cover, but most of the sections are really short. Would love to see more info once it’s added. I also think that the lead section could be a little longer, mentioning the Islamic influence before you talk about it along with some of the materials used without getting too detailed about it!

I’m not sure the “keeping it cool” section is necessary, as it doesn’t really have much of anything to do with architecture, and the materials used that work to keep the insides of buildings cold isn’t described. I’m not sure clay pots are architecture either. I’d say this section can easily be removed.

I think the extinction section and the materials section could be swapped, explaining that while we know the materials described were being used for building, the art and technique of the actual construction is gradually being lost.

There’s also some grammar errors but hey those can easily be edited :)