User:Hgabrie/Dorothee Kern/Gmmuell Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Hgabrie


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Dorothee Kern


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The lead section of this article is brief and concise. I think it does a good job of giving the most important information while not getting into too much detail. I think this lead is good the way it is, however the information that is given in the lead should correspond to more detailed information found in later sections of the article, which is not the case here.

Content

The content of this article past the lead section is very limited, and includes several lists that could be edited to a better format. As mentioned above, I think it would be a good idea to expand on the information found in the lead section. If you are able to find more information on Relay Therapeutics, MOMA Therapeutics, her time on the East German basketball team, and the German Academy of Sciences Leopoldina, I think that would be helpful. You could also add information on where she was born and any other background information you can find. This article is on a female scientist, which deals with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps.

Tone and Balance

This article has a neutral tone and does not seem to show any bias. All of the information appears factual and does not point to any claim that would attempt to persuade readers.

Sources and References

The information in this article all seems to be properly cited, and there are many links embedded throughout the article pointing to other topics that are relevant to this subject. The links appear to work correctly. There seem to be a lot of sources referenced in this article, yet fairly little information. I wonder if you would be able to find some additional information in those sources that is relevant to the subject.

Organization

I think the organization of this article could be worked on. The lead section looks good, but the only other sections are research and awards, which list out her accomplishments. If you are able to add more content, I think it would be great to add more sections to make the article more comprehensive. I would also get rid of the list format and find a better way to portray information about her research and accomplishments. Also, I would refrain from starting a section using pronouns, and use the subject's last name for at least the first occurrence in a new section.