User:Hhavenh/Manipulation (psychology)/Joyb3 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Hhavenh


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Hhavenh/Manipulation_%28psychology%29?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Manipulation (psychology)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Just bolded the edits:

"...beauty, feelings of entitlement, and a lack of empathy.[1]"

"...assertive self-enhancement (self-promotion) and antagonistic self-protection (self-defense)."

"with narcissistic personality disorder to manipulate others."

Hi! So, I think there is a lot to this article you can work on, and you've added a great section thus far! I would work on adding more sections like this, with mental illnesses and personality disorders, and adding those into the Lead section. The lead section should reflect the content in the article and currently does not mention any type of mental illness or disorder. The lead could also mention the main topics of the article, which currently is not a lot, but I would pay attention to that and ensure that once you've got a good handle on the body of the article, the lead reflects it. The lead also mentions persuasion, which it does not mention again, so I would adjust that or add a section differentiating between manipulation and influence and persuasion.

You could add sections about manipulation and its application: workplace, schools, relationships, everyday life, etc. You could also discuss the motivations of manipulators, how people manipulate, why, and maybe the psychology behind manipulation/why certain people manipulate when others don't.

You could add a lot of material to this article, so I'm excited to see what changes you make. Great start, though.

Very informative and neutral.