User:Hippolotamus/Panhellenic Games/Lindsing17 Peer Review

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Hippolotamus
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Hippolotamus/Panhellenic Games
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Panhellenic Games

Evaluate the drafted changes
wow, you added a lot of sections, I'm very impressed with it.

All sections about the separate sports festivals individually are very detailed and a very necessary addition. the images that go with them are also well chosen, though I may make some of the captions shorter.

I agree the lead needs a fix, the chart given can honestly go later in the article, and the lead may not even be necessary. I would either move the lead into the description, or make the lead a written version of what is communicated by the chart.

I would make the 'Female Athletes' section into a 'Participants' or 'Characteristics of Participants' section. You could explore women, non-Greeks', disabled, or poor athletes in a more generalized section. This would also help with your search for more information for it.

As for references, wow. You went from an article with no references to 25. That is a crazy amount of edits. Focusing future/unadded articles on diversity of athletes would be good.

I think articles about the role of games in Greek religious/political society is not a bad idea. I also agree with adding the connection to the modern games. I would focus mostly on the symbolic linkage rather than how the modern games were founded. You could work off of articles from the Olympic Games article and the Ancient Olympic Games for ease of finding articles, since both are fairly dense/complete articles.

Because of how good the Ancient Olympic Games article is, I would link directly to it in the Olympic games section. I would then makes the other three games a bit longer to compensate for their shorter base articles.

You could maybe also explore the relationship between the four games in relation to each other in the opening/shared themes across all four?

But yeah wow amazing edits. Keep up the good work.