User:Historian11233/Mariposa War/Gg808 Peer Review

General info
User:Historian11233
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Historian11233/Mariposa War
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Mariposa War

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

Guiding questions:


 * Lead has been expanded to incorporate new content and clarify necessary context
 * Includes an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic
 * As you progress with the draft and define the major sections in the article, make sure to foreshadow those sections in the lead

Content

 * Added content is relevant to the topic and up to date
 * Good background information provided
 * As you continue adding to the article, the body needs more information on the war itself- probably warrants another section

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Informative and not persuasive- good
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * "So-called 'Indian Problem'"- while I agree with the sentiment, I think the use of the phrase "so-called" sounds accusatory because it's not academic- consider replacing with "alleged" or something else of the like

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Needs additional sources
 * The links in the reference section work
 * Added sources are credible

Overall: this is a really interesting topic and you have a good start updating the information!