User:HistoryandLiterature/James P.M. Ntozi/Lf266 Peer Review

Peer review
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General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? HistoryandLiterature
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:HistoryandLiterature/James P.M. Ntozi

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? This is a new article, so everything that has been added to the lead has been added by this user.
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? The lead sentence only mentions that Ntozi is a faculty member at Makerere University, and nothing about his HIV/AIDS research.
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? The lead provides relevant information about every section except Demography of Uganda and Selected African Countries, which is one of the largest sections. Maybe there should be a mention of this book in the lead to ensure that all information is highlighted.
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? Some of the interests of Ntozi are not mentioned again (ex. reproductive health) which maybe suggests that it shouldn't be in the lead.
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? This lead may be a little too detailed. In my opinion, it is not necessary to include Ntozi's special interests or skills. Instead, his career and education should be highlighted.

Lead evaluation
This is a fairly strong lead because it provides a lot of important information about Ntozi, a lot of which is explained in detail later in the article. If this was to be improved, I would suggest 1) including info about Demography of Uganda... due to the size of its section, 2) include more about his career in the leading sentence, and 3) trim some of the information about his special skills and interests or move them somewhere else. I would also consider including something about the timeline of his work, since it is not clear when he was mostly active until you read further on.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? Everything added is relevant to Ntozi.
 * Is the content added up-to-date? Everything about Ntozi is fairly up-to-date, especially considering that his work has spanned over several decades.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? There is some information that, in my mind, may not be totally necessary, but everything belongs nonetheless.

Content evaluation
The information about Ntozi is completely relevant to the subject and up-to-date. There is some extraneous information in my opinion, such as him being robbed and attacked. Besides this however, there is a lot of good information about him included.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral? Everything is neutrally stated.
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? There are no biased opinions stated.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? As far as I can see, there aren't any views that are being over- or underrepresented.
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? There is no persuasion in this article.

Tone and balance evaluation
This article is very up to par with Wikipedia's guidelines about neutrality and fact-based sentences. Even the controversy section seems to be very neutral. Good job!

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? All the sources seem to be reliable and secondary.
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? As far as I can tell, this seems to be a good representation of the information available on the Internet about Ntozi.
 * Are the sources current? Yes, the sources seem to be very current, especially considering Ntozi's age.
 * Check a few links. Do they work? Some of the links I checked worked, but some of them are links specifically from Ohio State's library. I am not sure these links will be useful to others since you cannot use them if you're not an OSU student.

Sources and references evaluation
The sources given seem to be secondary/reliable and reflective of what's available about Ntozi, so they are very good for this article. Some of the links work, but I would try to see if there's another way you can provide links for the ones that only have OSU links listed. While I can access those sources, other people wouldn't be able to. I am sure that someone could find those sources if they wanted to, but they wouldn't be able to via the link given. As well, I would suggest creating more links to other Wiki articles within your own.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? Everything is written well and easy to read. If I had to change anything, I would try to combine more of the sentences into full paragraphs, since there are a lot of stand-alone sentences. Doing this could create better flow within the article.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? As far as I can see, there are no grammar/spelling errors.
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? Most of the sections are organized in a logical way. However, I would move the Education section closer to the beginning, since it would make it more chronological.

Organization evaluation
Overall, most of the sections in this article are organized well and there aren't any blatant grammar/spelling errors that I can see. I would combine some of the single sentences to make more paragraphs and move the Education section to the beginning, since these are small changes that could improve the article very quickly.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

Images and media evaluation
N/A

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject? Yes, there are plenty of secondary sources about Ntozi and fit Wiki's notability requirement.
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject? There is a decent number of sources for this article, and as far as I know it reflects all the literature available on Ntozi.
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles? Yes, with the exception of the Education section being placed towards the end.
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable? There could be more links to other Wiki articles, but overall there is a decent amount of them.

New Article Evaluation
Based on the information in this article, I think it is clear that Ntozi fits Wiki's notability requirement. There a good number of sources on him and the sections included all follow the pattern of similar articles - except with the placement of Education. This article could definitely benefit from having more links to other Wiki articles in order to be more discoverable and ensure the reader has quick access to relevant information.

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? Considering this is a new article, there is a very good amount of information provided on Ntozi.
 * What are the strengths of the content added? This is a very comprehensive article written about Ntozi, with rich detail and reliable sources. This clearly highlights the important aspects of his career and legacy in the world of academics, especially in Uganda. All of the information is presented clearly and in a way that makes sense.
 * How can the content added be improved? The lead section could have some of the less important information removed, as well as his research on HIV/AIDS and other notable achievements moved to the first sentence. There could also be more links to other Wiki pages.

Overall evaluation
This is a very good article, especially considering that you started from scratch. It is clear that you collected a lot of information about Ntozi and compiled it in a way that will be clear and useful to other people in the future. In my opinion, there are some small and quick improvements that could be made, and these are listed in my previous comments. Overall, great job on your article!