User:Hln24/Mae Timbimboo Parry/Dillanrowley Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Hln24 and Keevster
 * User:Hln24/Mae Timbimboo Parry

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Your lead was great however I did feel as if your first sentence was pretty long. You could break it up into a couple of sentences and make it a little bit longer.
 * Your leading sentence was great, I knew who you were going to be talking about and why.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * The content that you had I felt was really good. I know that the article isn't complete however there are a few things that i would love to know more about, specifically how the boarding school influenced her life and more about her family life.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * I felt as if you had good tone and weren't putting opinion or voice into the article. It is written in a good neutral tone.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * It looks like you have a lot of good sources. I noticed a lot of them are the same just listed multiple times. Not sure if that is a wikipedia thing or if you can merge them so that people can easily see that you are citing the same source multiple times.
 * Links work great and you have a good variety of sources so far.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * There were only a couple of things that I saw in the writing itself that I would change, one in the first sentence with the use of the word "and" used before "mother". The second is in the Historian section, I would make "Native American" plural when talking about interactions with them.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * The one image that is on there is great with a good depiction of the school she attended. I hope you'll be adding more pictures.

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * The article itself warrants enough material to be on its own and has the sources to back it up.
 * I feel that there is a lot more information available from sources that weren't mentioned, those would be great to add in as you add additional information.
 * Organization was great and follows the proper outline.