User:Hln24/Mae Timbimboo Parry/Wno33 Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? Hln24
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Hln24/Mae Timbimboo Parry

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

'''I am pleased with the introductory lead of your Wikipedia article. There are no complaints or suggestions that I have to offer, as your lead is concise and straightforward. I checked, and everything that you introduced in the lead was further explained in the article.'''

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics?

'''I would like to point out that I would consider this article to be one that addresses equity gaps, in the view of Wikipedia. First of all, this is about an indigenous woman. Historically, these two groups often do not receive the recognition they deserve for their achievements in history. With this being a recently written article, the sources are all still valid and the references and links to them confirm their validity. As far as content goes, I would be interested to know slightly more about her family- are the names of her children known? Did they grow up to accomplish anything? However, I understand that this information is likely unavailable for many less known people, so if this is the case it's totally understandable.'''

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

'''With the subject that you chose, I can see how there could possible be several ways to lean towards favoring a particular group in tone. However, as I read your article, I noticed no inappropriate tone or bias. I feel that you information was presented in such a way that different groups, such as the Shoshone nation, residents of Utah, and members of the Church of Jesus Christ of Latter Day Saints would feel fairly represented in this article.'''

'''I can say with confidence that there is not any strongly biased tone in this article. I felt that I was not pushed to support any particular direction. There is little to say in this section of the peer review except for good work.'''

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * Are the sources current?
 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?
 * Check a few links. Do they work?

'''This article was recently written. All source material, and corresponding links are working and correct. The quantity of sources is impressive! I see that there are 15 sources listed in your bibliography at the bottom of your article. I was also impressed that in so many places the information was supported by even two or three sources! Once again, I am impressed by your work and carefulness in this area. There are no suggestions for improvement that I can offer. Your sources appear to be from a variety of types. Good work.'''

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

'''I though the organization into headings and sub headings was wonderful. There was sufficient biographical information (early life and family information) to well establish who this person was. The next section, that dives deeply into Shoshone history, was essential I felt. This section in your article is absolutely critical, and you nailed it. I got the sense that this individual truly had done so very much for her tribe, and their unity with the State of Utah. I did wonder, however, if there is any information out on the internet regarding how the citizens of Utah may have responded to her actions. Would they have supported all that she was doing, or would there have been some dissent and disagreement?'''

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

'''There are two images in your article. Both, I felt, well represented important aspects of this individual's life. Of course it would have been nice to see an image of the actual subject, but I can understand that there is likely no such commonly available image. I, in the process of creating my Wikipedia article, am in the same situation where I cannot obtain an image of my subject as well. With the two images that you have, your article is sufficiently well represented visually!'''

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * How can the content added be improved?

'''A wonderful article so far! It felt like a complete Wikipedia article, which means that your partnership is well on the way to successfully getting this published so that people across the world can learn more about this subject. I was not bothered by any tone or grammatical or organizational details.'''