User:Hmf58/Where the Sidewalk Ends/Riverdogs54 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Hmf58


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Hmf58/Where_the_Sidewalk_Ends?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Where the Sidewalk Ends

Evaluate the drafted changes
Good job! I think you made some solid improvement to the article, and you have a good vision for how to further improve it. I really appreciated your addition of a sentence regarding Silverstein's ability to communicate complex themes through simple wording. That is a really fascinating point, and I think it is worth considering adding a section to the article on that topic, if locating sources is not too much of a problem. My only suggestion for that sentence is to try and find a way of saying it without the word "perhaps," as I think it may take away from the reader's confidence in that assertion. I also like your idea to add sources from about the book's controversy, and I understand your apprehension regarding using controversial sources. In my opinion, I would say that it is okay to use reliable but opinionated accounts of the controversy so long as you don't state controversial ideas yourself, but I could be wrong about that. That could be something that would be good to discuss with the Wiki.edu people.