User:Hmf58/Where the Sidewalk Ends/Rn15440 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Hmf58


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Hmf58/Where the Sidewalk Ends


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Where the Sidewalk Ends

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think the addition of the first citation is good, it's always useful to add a source for a claim being made. Regarding your idea about discussing the reasons why his work is popular, I think that could be an interesting point to make. However, maybe it would fit better in a section later on in the article, since there's potential to go a bit more in depth.

A source about the controversy point is definitely a good idea, and I agree that it's hard to find an unbiased source. Maybe try looking for a historical article detailing what steps were taken by the people who banned the books, since they would only be discussing the objective processes, rather than adding their own opinions? I'm not sure where you might find something like that, but I'm sure it's out there somewhere.

I think the bit about the Grammy Award is pretty interesting too. It's a short fun fact so there's definitely no harm in putting it in the lead. I will say that may you can try and reword it a bit so that it flows more naturally with the rest of the lead, maybe? It's a bit jarring now. Maybe adding it as a point like, "and two audio editions ... are also available. The audio editions earned Silverstein an award at the 27th Grammy Awards for 'Best Recording for Children'." or something to that effect? That way it feels a bit more connected to the rest of the lead's content

Regarding your note in the article body, I think it'd be neat to discuss the illustrations, and maybe also talk about the content itself a bit. The unedited article is pretty sparse in terms of actually discussing the poem, so anything you add would definitely be helpful to readers. Maybe some brief summarization and discussion of the art? I think it's a great idea though!

Overall, I think your changes are all on the right track! Some small tweaks to what you've already written, and whatever you want to add in the article body section, but other than that, I like what you've done!