User:Hmwhite9/Esther Apuahe/Amisere Peer Review

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Hmwhite9
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:Esther Apuahe
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Esther Apuahe

Evaluate the drafted changes
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I believe the article had beneficial edits, and the changes are easily justifiable. Holly was able to substantially add to the article and include new sections which drastically expands the Biography. The introduction provides a comprehensive overview and shows why Esther Apuahe is deserving of a biography. The lead is concise and explains her importance. No discernible tone issues were detected in the article, and the facts were layed out very clearly. The article elaborates her accomplishments in a tasteful way that is not too over the top. The content remained current and the organization throughout the article was clear and straightfoward.

The inclusion of new sources from textbooks and peer-reviewed journals bolstered reliability. Holly added many sources that were reliable through news articles and journal peer-revied articles. The sources are all recently published and the links to sources work well, they are also by a variety of authors.

In summary, the edits were commendable and definetly neccessary. I think the article could definetly benefit from an image of Esther Apuahe or even an image of her clinic. The sections were pretty brief, but because Apuahe is not the most famous person ever there was most likely not more information out there to be added. Overall, the article benefited from effective editing.