User:Hnas111/Movement in learning/Habtcnj Peer Review

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(Hnas111 )
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Hnas111/Movement in learning
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Movement in learning

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This is to share my review and feedback with you for your consideration and potential improvement. Hope my suggestions contribute to improving your article.

Modifying the original title of the article to “Integration of Movement in Learning Environments.” gives a better understanding and a clear start for the article. Adding a little introduction of the topic and the setting where the study was conducted, the exact sample size and the duration of the study would enhance the clarity and depth of your article.

You used reliable sources, but I don’t see how the findings of the first source are related to your topic. It would have been better if you used similar studies that are directly related to Elementary school students. You followed a neutral tone in putting the information in a balanced position. No bias in presenting the information. I found your writing clear, your sources verifiable, and the citations and link sharing are according to the Wikipedia guidelines. I also believe that this article can easily be accessed by the general readers.

In future development, I suggest the inclusion of diverse sources and perspectives to further enhance the article's comprehensiveness. Incorporating a wider range of related sources can help better understand the topic and contribute to a well-rounded exploration of the educational growth of elementary school students.