User:Hnas111/Movement in learning/Moralej2 Peer Review

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User:Hnas111
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 * User:Hnas111/Movement in learning
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Movement in learning:

Evaluate the drafted changes
After reading your edits for Movement in Learning, the word usage was clear and presented the information in a clear and concise way. The source you cited from came from a reliable and credible journal article from Life Sciences Education. The original article did have many errors in grammar and sentences that needed to be rewritten. The edits you made to these sentences captures the ideas that the original author was trying to portray. In addition, the new heading "Integration of Movement in Learning Environments" is relevant to the topic of interest and grabs the readers attention. The edits made in the article presented the information in a non-bias way. Although, the new heading presents one case study to examine I would like to see further representation of other research articles to compare and contrast.

Overall, the edits made were necessary to understanding the information presented in the article. I was really impressed with the addition of the case study. The information presented brought valuable insights into the research conducted on Movements in Learning. One of the ways the article can be improved is by editing the lead. Some of the information presented in the leads needs a source (citation). The lead is concise, yet it fails to provide the reader with a clear understanding of the components presented in the article. Having a good lead enhances the readability, accessibility, and overall quality of a Wikipedia article, contributing to a positive user experience and facilitating knowledge dissemination. I will also review my article's lead because it serves as the initial point of contact for the reader. Furthermore, I will conduct additional research to explore the possibility of finding a case study related to my topic on Sheltered Instruction.