User:Hohl0020/Freshwater acidification/Squamelia Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Emma113144, Hohl0020


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Hohl0020/Freshwater_acidification?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Freshwater acidification

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think that the structure flows quite well. In the section labeled "Freshwater vs Ocean Acidification," I think that they did a great job of explaining how the two areas differ in their abilities to tolerate different pH levels. One word that I think might be confusing is the word "higher" as a high pH would mean more basic and ocean acidification makes up the bulk of the concerns over current day pH levels, so perhaps changing this to "higher changes in pH" might be a little clearer.

For the part labeled "Harmful Effects on Aquatic Organisms" the structure is similarly well. I think breaking up the two sections was a good idea and it helps the section seem lighter than if they were combined. However, I noticed a few issues with wording. The second sentence is a little awkward as the first option is stated as a direct fact but the last two are given as conditionals. This isn't an issue with grammar but it does make that particular region a little difficult to fully grasp. Sentence 4 also has a small issue where it reads "These species are forced expend more energy," and I think fitting the word "to" in between "forced" and "expend" will fix this. Now that the word "sphagnum" is not longer capitalized in the second paragraph, I think the article looks good :)