User:Holagrad/sandbox

Wiki Students and Their Assigned Page
This is page with the drafts and ideas of how and  plan on editing the Visual Cliff Wikipedia page. After here, improved versions of these drafts will be moved to the Visual Cliff's Talk page and later the page itself.

User:HungryDesi/Visual cliff

Editing Plan
We plan on clarifying if it is an apparatus or study, we have found that reading it can come off confusing. We are going to do minor grammar changes. There a few inconsistencies that we would want to make more clear to the general audience. We are also planning on adding a subsection under infant studies. There are a few studies that have been done that have used the visual cliff that we think are relevant to use as previous studies. We also plan to make the animal section smaller. We thought having a subsection for each animal is irrelevant. We also want to update the sources for the animal section and the visual cliff. We want also to expand on adding how it relates to perception. If possible, we will try to find images to include for the page as well.

is organizing how to minimize the animal section to be more concise. She will also be working on syntax and grammar.

will be adding to a new section under infant studies. She will also be working on syntax and grammar. She is also looking for images to add to the page.

Both will also add sources based on the changes they make.

Price Comments
Great plan. Keep on making progress! Paul C Price (talk) 17:38, 28 October 2019 (UTC)

Draft of Edits

 * 1) For the editing on the section about the animals, the first sentence will be removed and replaced with: Before Gibson and Walk conducted their study with human infants, multiple experiments were conducted using rats, one-day-old chicks, newborn kids, kittens, pigs, adult chickens, dogs, lambs, and monkeys. Overall, most species would avoid the deep side of the visual cliff, some right after being born. The first visual cliff experiment was conducted with rats who were raised in the dark and in the light. The results were that both groups of rats would walk all over the shallow and deep parts of the cliff without an issue, which surprised Gibson, Walk, and Thomas Tighe (a research assistant). A later experiment with kittens raised in the dark and then placed on the visual cliff showed that depth perception was not innate in all species as the kittens would walk on either side of the visual cliff. After six days of being in the light, the kittens would avoid the deep side of the visual cliff (Rodkey, 2015). Later researchers conducted experiments using other species.
 * 2) Sections about Chicks and Lambs might be removed as it has no source.

Possible sources we want to add
Sorce, J. F., Emde, R. N., Campos, J., & Klinnert, M. D. (2000). Maternal emotional signaling: Its effect on the visual cliff behavior of 1-year-olds. In D. Muir & A. Slater (Eds.), Infant development: The essential readings. (pp. 282–292). Malden: Blackwell Publishing

Witherington, D. C., Campos, J. J., Anderson, D. I., Lejeune, L., & Seah, E. (2005). Avoidance of Heights on the Visual Cliff in Newly Walking Infants. Infancy, 7(3), 285–298

Rodkey, E. (2015). The Visual Cliff's Forgotten Menageries: Rats, Goats, Babies, and Myth-Making in the History of Psychology|url=|journal=Journal of the History of the Behavioral Sciences|volume=51|pages=113-140|via=}

Kaufman, L. W. (1976). Duration of early visual experience and visual cliff behavior of chicks. Developmental Psychobiology, 9(1), 1–4.

Updates
We have made minor changes, edited the caption of the image, and have included an external link to a video. The minor changes were grammatical edits.

We have added the Rodkey source (third source in the above section) and a paragraph about animal studies (#1 under Draft of Edits) with the visual cliff onto the Visual Cliff Wiki page.

Upcoming Edits
Holagrad is working on creating a paragraph about infant studies in more detail and she working on adding 2 new sources.

HungryDesi is working on editing the animal section further and is reviewing two of the cited sources for accuracy and relevance.

Contributions
Holagrad has edited the caption under the image and made grammatical fixes throughout the entire page. She has added a video about the visual cliff to the Wikipedia page.

HungryDesi added a paragraph to serve as an introduction for the animal studies that we done before the infant visual cliff studies. She has added a source.

Both are looking for images of the visual cliff to add to the page.