User:Hollyb98/Meditation/Anderson268 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Hollyb98


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Hollyb98/Meditation?action=edit


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Meditation

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The lead is clear and concise and describes the topic. It would be good to add a sentence to the lead that describes the major sections. The lead is good, but I would not recommend adding much more (other than the addition of the sentence describing the major sections).

Content

The content added under "technique typologies" was already stated in the previous paragraph. Although, the additions provided more detail than the previous paragraph. Possibly, the previous paragraph could be partially removed. The content is from 2019, so it is up-to-date. Before you remove any of the paragraph before your bullet points, do not forget to look at the instructor feedback. There were some helpful questions and suggestions about that!

Tone and Balance

The added information is neutral; I did not feel like it was biased or persuasive.

Source and References

Sources are good and both are current. They are not from random websites and the links work. Keep using sources like this and you should be good.

Organization

The bullet points are good (except for the confusing terms mentioned by the instructor). The second addition was okay. The sentence included a lot of quotes. As the instructor mentioned, just paraphrase that more. That will help a lot!

Overall Impression

Overall, your content comes from good sources. They are up-to-date, which is very important. I think you are on a good path to finding and adding more information. When reading the article, I was interested in the section "meditation in the workplace". I have done some reading about mindfulness in schools and how it can help reduce stress, behavioral issues, and more. Would the same outcome be possible with meditation? Would mindfulness meditation be helpful if implemented in the classroom setting? These might be some topic options to consider researching more about. If you found any good information, you could add a section called "meditation in the classroom" to compliment "meditation in the workplace".