User:HomoeroticMikePenceExperience/Prostitution in colonial India/Dmosh75 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

HomoeroticMikePenceExperience


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:HomoeroticMikePenceExperience/Prostitution in colonial India


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Prostitution in colonial India

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * The first paragraph while informative reads more like a summation of the issue rather than an addition to the article
 * The second paragraph (once the use of slang is fixed) is a good addition. It is an improvement to the perspectives behind the cantonment acts
 * Perhaps you could more plainly state parliaments inability to place responsibility upon the soldiers as the cause for the regulations coming only to the prostitutes