User:Honette/Copy edit

George Juskalian
I've done another round of CE. Please check my edits in case I misinterpreted information. By no means this is a final edit. Other editors may spot something I missed or I could detect them later. I understand that obtaining the Featured Article status for this article is desired. The article's tone, cohesion, choice of words and sentence structures is a separate task that may need to be examined in order to meet a certain criterion (I have no idea what it is). Best to ask featured article reviewers for their advice.

Did Kevork Juskalian go with his family to the United States or did he go by himself? I ask because the sentence starting with Consequently (meaning as a result of his moving to the United States), the word family is used. Family is a group of people but the previous sentence states one person fled to the U.S. Maybe it's meant to read: ''... and subsequently fled to the United States with his family ...''

This sentence appears to be randomly inserted and does not have a relationship with the paragraph.

Is there a year for this? Other dates provide the year but not this one?

Initial means "occurring at the beginning". Does this imply the 1st Infantry Division had another objective, I thought? Or maybe the sentence is meant to say: When landing in Oran on November 8, 1942, the 1st Infantry Division's primary objective was to confront the German Afrikan Korps commanded by Erwin Rommel and secondary objective was to support Bernard Law Montgomery's advance against the Italian forces.?

Who was avoiding the Soviet? I interpret the sentence as: (a) the POWs were moved and the German troops remained—the POWs were keeping away from the Soviet; and (b) once the POWs were moved, the Soviet stopped their advancement. Maybe the sentence is meant to read: ... the German troops moved themselves and the POWs westward into Germany to avoid ... or ''... the German troops moved and the POWs moved westward into Germany to avoid ...''

Is there a year for this?